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[RedAxie]

....you should never expect the worse...ever..

[Dark Dragon]

Ok, I know, but I'm sorry for putting that. On a slightly better topic, I have a new poem! yeays!
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Dear Mommy
Dear Mommy,
I am so so sorry,
I have left to go to that party.
I know you told me not to go,
But I just couldn't say no.
My friend will be there,
So I hope you don't care,
That I went there.
You may need to know,
That there will be drinking,
And I plan to walk home.
I know what you're thinking,
But I shall tell you now,
I will die.
Please don't cry,
It was my fault that I died.
I will take that shortcut,
Then get hit by a truck,
I will fly far across that road,
And hit that tree by Mr. Mode's,
I won't suffer all that pain from my back,
Because I will die on impact.
But you will see this all,
Because it will be on TV is all,
And I have told you a million times,
How I wanted to fly.
So here I am,
Flying this time,
Right into that tree with wind chimes.
That guy will go to jail,
And I know you will feel that you have failed,
To protect me,
From this scene.
But mommy,
Please trust me,
I didn't mean to leave you,
But you seemed to have already knew,
That this sort of thing,
Would really bring,
This kind of thing,
To you this warm spring.
Mommy, I feel you must know,
That I love you so,
And that I cared for you greatly,
So don't worry when you don't see me in the morning,
Just because I am not there,
Doesn't mean that I don't care.

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I tried to get it to rhyme all the way through, but even if it didn't, I still love it as much as I did when I first typed it. Read and comment, please?

[RedAxie]

-cries-

[Chevalier-Ange]

Wow...very powerful, and quite emotional as well.  Nicely done.

[Dark Dragon]

Thank you. I like it and how it turned out. I know it is sad, but the idea hit. And now, here it is.

[Dark Dragon]

Ok, so I haven't posted in quite some time, but here we go!
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Dear Father

Dear Father,
I know I've been such a bother,
You even tell me so,
So I decided not to take it anymore.
I'm not home tonight,
Because I left at 9,
To go to that party,
There is beer,
But what would you care.
You drink to,
So why can't I do it to?
I will die,
But don't you cry,
I won't be dead,
Until they take that glass out of my head.
I will drive drunk to that park,
Then get hit by that other car,
I won't be wearing my seatbelt,
So I fly through the windshield and hit the cement.
They put me through surgery,
With your consent.
Once that glass comes out of my head,
They then pronounce me dead.
I just want you to know,
I love you so,
Even though,
You told me that you hated me so,
That I should die.
Well here you go,
I will live no more.

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I know this one is sad to, but the idea came to me at school so I decided to write it down. And now I'm sharing it to you all! Read and comment, please?

[OnewingedDragon]

Very dark. There's a couple misspellings and the rhyming scheme could use a bit of touching up, but otherwise very well done.

[Dark Dragon]

I like it. And if I may ask, where are my misspellings?

[OnewingedDragon]

Ok, so I haven't posted in quite some time, but here we go!
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Dear Father

Dear Father,
I know I've been such a bother,
You even tell me so,
So I decided not to take it anymore.
I'm not home tonight,
Because I left at 9,
To go to that party,
There is beer,
But what would you care.
You drink too,
So why can't I do it too?
I will die,
But don't you cry,
I won't be dead,
Until they take that glass out of my head.
I will drive drunk to that park,
Then get hit by that other car,
I won't be wearing my seatbelt,
So I fly through the windshield and hit the cement.
They put me through surgery,
With your consent.
Once that glass comes out of my head,
They then pronounce me dead.
I just want you to know,
I love you so,
Even though,
You told me that you hated me so,
That I should die.
Well here you go,
I will live no more.

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I know this one is sad to, but the idea came to me at school so I decided to write it down. And now I'm sharing it to you all! Read and comment, please?

I should have stated Small misspellings. but that changes the entire meaning of the sentence, or at least lets it make sense.

[Dark Dragon]

Oh, ok I see now. Thank you for that.

[Dark Dragon]

Ok, so I know I haven't posted much, but my internet won't let me on the site for some reason, so it may be a long while before I can post anything in my threads. Sorry for the inconvenience.

[Chevalier-Ange]

You aren't alone believe me. Not being able to access the site from various places seems to be a very common theme these days. I believe a few people have mentioned this to Mike, but as of yet, the issue continues to be just that...an issue. Hopefully he will resolve it soon.

[Dark Dragon]

Lokk it, look it, I got it to work! Here is my next poem.
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Hatred of self
She sits alone,
In this dark little room,
When no one sees her,
She picks up the knife,
And then she will end her life.
Unless there happens to be,
That certain someone to see,
Her in this room,
With that knife,
And stops her from herself.
She hates her life,
That is why she has this knife.
He takes that knife from her hands,
And tells her that he knows she can,
Do so much more in life,
That is why they are there.
He cares for her,
She starts to like him,
Then they get up and walk,
To his room,
Where they draw to music,
And live in their own way.

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There it is, my next poem. And it ended quite well. For once. Read and respond.

[Mike Caron]

You aren't alone believe me. Not being able to access the site from various places seems to be a very common theme these days. I believe a few people have mentioned this to Mike, but as of yet, the issue continues to be just that...an issue. Hopefully he will resolve it soon.

Although I do not wish to hijack this thread, no one has mentioned anything to me about this. Nor do I see anything under my control that would cause this.

I think that Rogers is just the worst ISP ever.

[Dark Dragon]

Ok, so here it is, the long(maybe) awaited for, my next poem! I did this at school so sorry for the length.
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No longer needed

It's been 6 months now,
since we said goodbye,
and ever since then,
we haven't even said hi.
I know what I did was the wrong choice,
but I threw myself to you,
and you said no for the first time.
so here I am planning to die,
just because you said I'm no longer needed to you,
that I should just die.
So now here I am,
all alone in the world,
thinking that I am not needed,
that I'm just a pone wandering alone.
My life is crap,
my friends abandoned me,
and not even you would go out with me.
Since I'm no longer needed,
since I know I should go,
there is one thing stopping me,
and I think you should know.
I do still love you,
I do have one more crush,
and just to spite you,
I will live longer.
Even though you tell me,
That I'm not needed,
I will still be here,
just to prove you wrong.

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There you have it, my next poem. I still like it though, I thought of this last night and just had to write it down but I didn't have any paper. So I remembered it and posted it here. Read and respond.