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[Shadow Spector]

The aqua colour will be the actuall story, if u have an comment about it please put it in beige. If it has nothing to do with the story please put it in white, or better yet please don't put it all together.

  As he stood up, within the secluded forest covered mountain top, he gazed over the catsle directally below him, off of the cliff, "Now now they think that i will be easely deturred sinc the normal means has been block off from me.", Thian childish voiced echoed down the mountain, and penitrated the patrol's ear, sending down an erie chill down there spin, causing them to increase the guard, "Oh this is priceless it realy is, your front gate because you don't think that anyone would attack you fom the back montain range.", Taking a slight breath and sighing, Thian decended the cliff side manipulatting the shadows to give him an path to manuver down the mountain.
   A few minutes later he jumped down right behind the obliviouse guard, Pulling out one of his daggers, he quickly, and quitely slit the guards throught, and sat him down gentaly, advoiding any unessasary noise. Turnning to the courtyard and jumped down into the shadows hidding once again. After the next set of guard walked by he sliped in to the holy shrine were the tailasmin is located. Seeing the glint of the holy symbol hanging from it's golden chain, Reaching out to grab it steathly. Stowing the away, arround his neck, and down his shirt he turned to leave. Steping back into the courtyard a patrol of two guards cought him leaving the archway, "And here I thought you would never find me.", Thian laughed in wardly as he spoke the words.
   "I guess shadow theif yoou will die here.", the guards said in unision as they both drew their swords simotainiously.
   Drawing his long sword from his back he readied for their attack, "My dagger won't win me this battle now will they?", the two guards glared at him as the advance forward, "The shadows will consum your soul!", Thian cold call alerted all of the guard and awaken the entire palace to his presence.
  "Not so smart are you?", the guards laughed. One swung his sword but was cut short when an dagger was trusted into his throat, and thian sword raise up to to deflect the others blade from hitting him.
  "you were saying? With out a litle challege geting away there would be no fun in trying anything in the first place, plus a litle chaose in this peaceful kindom, whos boarders only extend as far as the wall itself.", Thian's words range a string of truth to the guards.
    "Hide yourself would you i will deal with those guards.", Pausing momentarly, "I still want to talk with you more.", pushing thian into the shadows, asthe other gaurds rushed around the corner.
   "Where is that sun of a ..."
   "Watch your tounge comander Loyd." the prince said as he walked into veiw.
   "But he got away taking out more of my men."
   "I said shut your mouth now!.", the prince words held anger, and hateread towrds the shadow theif as well, "Were did he go?"
   "He acended the mountains with the add of shadows sir."
   "Might i add Sigen that loyd is ready to kill the next thing he can get his hands on, what would happen if that next thing was you.", malicious voice of the prince penitrated everyone other than Sigen, and loyd who were near the prince when he spoke the words."
   "Cough it up now you incolen worm tell use were that snake realy is!", Loyd's anger ehcoed in his voice.
   "I told you what you wanted to know, so leave me be."
   "What was that boy?", The prince snaped at Sigen lack of concern, "Beside that I don't think he could have been here too long."
   "Lord Argunis, the tailasmin has been taken!"
   "Dame you i have no time for this commander send your men out look for the shadow theif."
   "As you wish mi lord Argunis."
   "What are you still doing around here? I thought i told you to find that Bastard!",  turning to Sigen ,"As for you, your luck i don't have you killed here and now."
   "Your correct sure I am lucky to not be killed for how I acted here.", Sigen said as he turned to sit on the step to the Arch way, 'Dose he know that I allowed him to escape? or is it that i talked back to him and gave him additude? Either way it is not safe for me to be here any more.', looking were thian was, and noticed him that he wasn't there, 'I guess he realy did flee in the heat of the moment oh well.'

[Endless]

Your rp didn't work out because it didn't grasp interest nor did it have any where, where someone could jump in really. I would have joined it but it wasn't my style of writing. Anyways the rp was boring all in all. I hope the story works out Chronous~~

[Shadow Spector]

Tha for the encouragement... with the Rp it as more of n sence to set an pace i wanted to try and have thing develop with nothing to go on, and as you can see things have been changed from the Rp to the story.

   Returnning to his quarters, Sigen started to question the change in his lrd personality, 'Could that insignificant charm being taken from the shrin could have cause this that the world will surly fall into the hands of Aurant, the Demon king?', sigh deep due to the exaugton of the day's work, and from the ridiculling of Argunis as well, 'If the prince, our lord, is going to be like this than i wan't nthing to do with it in the least bit.', Taking an seat on his woden cot, Sigen proceeded to lay down. sleep had final taken hold of him when he heard his name being called.
   "Who is there?", he questioned the disenbodied voice.
   "You should know that by now shouldn't you?"
    "So it is yoou after all.", Sigen stress started to flee his body as he sat up once again, "You didn't leave these grounds even though the guards have been tripled.",  hint of inpresion washed over Sigen spoke the faint words.
   "So your point you wanted to talk to me correct?'
   "That I did bt now is not the time, nor the place to do such an thing."
   "the why don't we head into the forest out side theses walls?", feeling up to an little walk sigen left his quarters, and headed to the front gates. The guards at the gate merely let him pass by but heard them utter a few words, don't expect to rturn here ever again, your no welcom, 'Good i wouldn't want to stay here much longer as it is.', Sigen keep his words to himself, as he made his was to an clearing in the forest. In the center of the Clearing stood, none other than Thian the shadow theif.
   "So shall we get this conversation over with?", thian words were emtion;es, and cold, "After all your here to join  my cause, you have been banshed from your home, and now an helpless wonderer, in chaotic domain."
   "So it is true thn the demonic lord aurant has truly return and the chose has been selected, to over through him?"
   "That is so, but I'm only looking out for me."
   "What do you mean by that?"
   "We i need oyou to survive as much as you need me, so are you ready to learn the truth about the lies that you were feed?",Thian words left Sigen speahless, and motionless.
    'so is he the envoy of darkness as everyone paints him to be, or is he the savior which reveals the truth of matters? It is true that i have benn banishied so I have no choice in the matter.'
   "Why do you think Lord Argunis let you off so easyly there?", Thian paused slightly to allow the words to sink in before he continued, "why do you think I have chosen you?"

[Ares]

You know, you're main problem seems to be typos. I'm sure if you spell-checked and whatnot, you would have a good story, but right now, this is hard to read.

[ScienceFair]

You know, you're main problem seems to be typos. I'm sure if you spell-checked and whatnot, you would have a good story, but right now, this is hard to read.

Indeed and it's important to point out that it's hard to read not because it's illegible but because the punctuation/grammar/spelling makes you go ugh and you stop reading it.  :-)

[Shadow Spector]

When i don't post at an libary i will fix it, of if i use an acount with an word program with spell checker.
When that happens i will fix my last 2 posts as well as any of them i have done.