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Re: thoughts of the dark cross
« Reply #15 on: April 24, 2010, 12:44:31 AM »
oh... my... god! it's been WAY to long! but i have a good excuse... no i don't. i guess i went a few days without ideas and forgot the site even existed. sorry guys. plz forgive me?  :'(
oh well. I'M BACK... for now. but i came with:

Sheep
We are all sheep,
Sheep in a herd.
The herd is guided by the dog,
The dog that all obey.
Where the dog wants to go,
The herd moves to obediently.
The herd dare not question,
The dog’s command.
Those few sheep,
Who are different,
Therefore unique,
are quickly picked off.
They are seen as degenerates,
Infectious to the herd.
Though there are a few,
Who dare disobey the dog.
Of those who disobey,
Most are forced back to the herd,
The same direction as the rest.
Few leave the herd behind,
To remain on their own,
Going where they want to,
With no one to tell them where to go.
However,
Few sheep make it to this point.
Therefore,
Though living their own way,
They live it alone.
These “loner” sheep,
Rarely find each other,
At least early in life.
But in the end,
All return to the herd.
Though brief the visit of some,
Others are there the rest of their lives.
Then,
There is the Sheppard,
The one who has given us all we need,
The one to whom we belong to.
Yet The Sheppard,
Despite haven given us all we need,
Leaves us to nature.
We are all sheep.
Sheep in a herd.
A herd guided by the dog.
A herd and dog owned by a Sheppard.
All in the hands of nature.

so, did you all enjoy it? i bet you did. either way, leave cunstructive criticism. it may happen again where i forget to post in like, months, but i'm truely sorry if it does and that it did. let's just hope i can keep focused on the poems for now.  :)
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it is a fickle thing. it warms and greets, then rips and tears. it is great, but monsterous. they are forgiving, but unforgiving in your soul. it begins and ends. it comes with pain, oh such a great pain. it is love.

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Re: thoughts of the dark cross
« Reply #16 on: April 28, 2010, 10:03:01 PM »
woooo, another one. this one isn't based off anything inparticular, it's just something that came to me. whilst reading, try doing so in a symbolic sense, because that was the intention here. please enjoy:
In the valley
I stand here,
On the Cliffs of Insanity and Anger.
I look down into the valley,
The Valley of Fire.
The flames burn,
Everlasting and ever powerful,
Like a diamond.
The fires burn.
Before me I see the spires,
The Spires of Sorrow and Pain,
Ever so tall they tower over even me,
Here on the Cliffs of Insanity and Anger.
I look at them,
The Spires,
And I see they themselves burn.
Yet these fires are different.
The Spires burn not from the fires of the valley,
They burn from the hope,
The hope of those in the valley.
I stand here and watch them burn,
Knowing what I must do.
I am the traitor,
I am their destroyer.
I stare down at them,
Those who wait there,
In the valley.

there you go. please leave constructive criticism. i hope you enjoyed it :)
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it is a fickle thing. it warms and greets, then rips and tears. it is great, but monsterous. they are forgiving, but unforgiving in your soul. it begins and ends. it comes with pain, oh such a great pain. it is love.
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